Short film offline edit

 

This is the offline edit of our shortfall. With this edit, we put all the footage that we needed in chronological order, from the storyboard that we created prior to filming, so that we can know what the film will look like from beginning to end. There were no effects included, however, we placed a text in-between to separate each scene, along with a static transition. From this draft, we figured that there were some things that needed to be added in order to make the final product look pleasing, such as some music, which would set the mood throughout the film. Also, there would need to be a voiceover put in place as the sound of the strong wind takes over some of the dialogue. However, following the conventions of a short film, which has voiceovers to lay out what is happening in the narrative, we knew that this could work out. 

 Feedback no.1

- The sound of the wind makes it hard to hear the dialogue

- There are a few jump cuts that could be smoother 

- Good storyline used as it is relatable 

Feedback no.2

- Kick the chair harder to make more of an impact

- Spend more time closing the fist to convey the showing anger

Feedback no.3

- Background noise makes it difficult for the dialogue to be heard

- Use a voiceover to cover any quiet dialogue

Feedback no.4

- Too much wind takes over the sound of the dialogue

- Good use of zooming in and out at times. 

Based on our overall feedback, one thing that was commented on was our storyline, in which people commented on how well we conveyed the theme of isolation. 

Another thing that was commented on was the fact that during the park scene with the character, there is the sound of the strong wind taking over the dialogue, which makes it hard for the audience to know what I am saying. When editing the final version, this will be something that will be strongly considered, and to make sure that the audience knows what is going on, there will be a voiceover placed over as a way to let them know what the character is saying.